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I-Dizzy
New Kid on the Block
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I-Dizzy


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PostSubject: RATE MY LYRICS   RATE MY LYRICS Icon_minitimeMon Jun 01, 2009 2:13 am

Before I start recording my shit i need your honest opinions on my lyrical ability so heres some shit i wrote

My waves spinnin like the solar system
Il leave you unresponsive just like a coma victim
I spit the heat and SMOKE the beats so let me ROLL and LICK em
I'm on a killin spree, but with a pad and pencil
I tell it like it is, I tell it plain and simple
Some niggas never get it like I was spittin riddles
I devour niggas eat them with my utensils
Im locked on target taking off im somethin like a missle
nuclear attack, call me atomic bomba(bomber)
Il never make it cus im Black? call me barack obama
Its me against the odds, its me against the world
life is a fuckin bitch, but damn i love that girl
Soon ima run the game like it was on a track
hip hop will never die its on my fuckin back
I dive in head first theres no goin back
Lyricist not a rapper but i still go hard on every track




Clouded by material things like money an cars
Physically free Mentally trapped by invisible bars
We became slaves to the game and praising the crack
Enter but no escape why you think they call it the trap

If we know it’s a trap why we walk right into it
We must not notice the trap cus we got so used to it
Stacks crack and cadillacs everywhere in our music
Money over life we think that’s all there is to it

That’s how its presented so that’s how we view it
Never question our motives like nike we just do it
Move weight like L.O. we dont get get it, that’s foolish
But we blind to it by music we influenced

But now we breakin the mold They just said we was monkeys
And enslaved us cus they knew oneday that we’d lead the country

At the moment its hurtin an ill it needs to change doctors and get medicine
The first step was for Obama to be the first black President
Now they will finally see our ability its evident
That our race aint the weakest link more like the best candidate








Sumthin like a disease im causin a epidemic
Lyrically ima killa writin niggas exit tickets
Top of ma game jus like a hat ahead call me a fitted
on point like jagged edge fuck dat my edges rigid
Ya nigga b building bridges vivid imagination
Cleanin garbage niggas up call me da head of sanitation
Dey try to rush me but im waitin
Yung an restless but armed wit patience
you know i got the dough so the cake I am a-bakin
Niggas hope to reach my level get parallel dey just adjacent
Which means dey next 2 me so gon head an pluck ya ACES
Ima KING wit many QUEENS my queens got many faces
So JACK b prepared armed wit 10’s got clips an cases
Use da CARDS u were dealt stay true an don’t forsake it
U could have a ROYAL FLUSH lifes a game watch how ya play it


Also what line stood out most to you?
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lilmike_35215
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PostSubject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS   RATE MY LYRICS Icon_minitimeMon Jun 01, 2009 2:33 am

that shit sound on point 2 me but the shit i like tha most was

Niggas hope to reach my level get parallel dey just adjacent
Which means dey next 2 me so gon head an pluck ya ACES
Ima KING wit many QUEENS my queens got many faces
So JACK b prepared armed wit 10’s got clips an cases
Use da CARDS u were dealt stay true an don’t forsake it
U could have a ROYAL FLUSH lifes a game watch how ya play it Cool

u make yo own beats, got sum2 doin it 4 u or use beats by otha rappers?
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Wave-Sensei
Wave-Sensei
Suprah


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Number of posts : 446
Age : 32
Location : Bronx
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PostSubject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS   RATE MY LYRICS Icon_minitimeMon Jun 01, 2009 5:08 pm

abc flow
sound like dr. suess wrote it

get back and work on your craft

variate your rhyming paterrn
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Imfamus
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Imfamus


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Location : The Chi
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PostSubject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS   RATE MY LYRICS Icon_minitimeMon Jun 01, 2009 7:40 pm

It sounds decent...post it in the Cypher Thread if you want to see what others think about it.... http://www.sbwaves.com/off-topic-f3/cypher-thread-t2101-76.htm#28512
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Number of posts : 1260
Age : 33
Location : New Orleans, Louisiana
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PostSubject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS   RATE MY LYRICS Icon_minitimeMon Jun 01, 2009 7:44 pm

I liked it, well u started off kinda shaky but everything after the 1st verse i liked.
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gataboyslim
Ripplemania
Ripplemania
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Number of posts : 93
Age : 41
Location : from nj 2 va
Originated Wave Site : Wave builder
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PostSubject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS   RATE MY LYRICS Icon_minitimeTue Jun 02, 2009 1:51 am

Not bad man. Da first verse was a lil' weak. I liked the second verse the best. I can tell u got some skills, u gave some conscious hip hop and some word play. Stay at it and always come from the heart.
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PostSubject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS   RATE MY LYRICS Icon_minitimeFri Jun 05, 2009 6:35 pm

Well man you can seperate a lyricist/ emceee from a rapper by their rhyme structure. That first verse started almost every line with I or I'll. Simple as Hell. You picked it up a lil after there but keep working like how we keep brushing.
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Number of posts : 769
Age : 33
Location : charleston, sc (chucktown)
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PostSubject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS   RATE MY LYRICS Icon_minitimeSat Jun 06, 2009 7:55 am

u did better as u went along in ya rap..
keep it up..
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