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+4Imfamus Suprah lilmike_35215 I-Dizzy 8 posters |
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I-Dizzy New Kid on the Block
Number of posts : 20 Age : 32 Location : A-town Originated Wave Site : 360waves.net Reputation : Registration date : 2009-04-23
| Subject: RATE MY LYRICS Mon Jun 01, 2009 2:13 am | |
| Before I start recording my shit i need your honest opinions on my lyrical ability so heres some shit i wrote
My waves spinnin like the solar system Il leave you unresponsive just like a coma victim I spit the heat and SMOKE the beats so let me ROLL and LICK em I'm on a killin spree, but with a pad and pencil I tell it like it is, I tell it plain and simple Some niggas never get it like I was spittin riddles I devour niggas eat them with my utensils Im locked on target taking off im somethin like a missle nuclear attack, call me atomic bomba(bomber) Il never make it cus im Black? call me barack obama Its me against the odds, its me against the world life is a fuckin bitch, but damn i love that girl Soon ima run the game like it was on a track hip hop will never die its on my fuckin back I dive in head first theres no goin back Lyricist not a rapper but i still go hard on every track
Clouded by material things like money an cars Physically free Mentally trapped by invisible bars We became slaves to the game and praising the crack Enter but no escape why you think they call it the trap
If we know it’s a trap why we walk right into it We must not notice the trap cus we got so used to it Stacks crack and cadillacs everywhere in our music Money over life we think that’s all there is to it
That’s how its presented so that’s how we view it Never question our motives like nike we just do it Move weight like L.O. we dont get get it, that’s foolish But we blind to it by music we influenced
But now we breakin the mold They just said we was monkeys And enslaved us cus they knew oneday that we’d lead the country
At the moment its hurtin an ill it needs to change doctors and get medicine The first step was for Obama to be the first black President Now they will finally see our ability its evident That our race aint the weakest link more like the best candidate
Sumthin like a disease im causin a epidemic Lyrically ima killa writin niggas exit tickets Top of ma game jus like a hat ahead call me a fitted on point like jagged edge fuck dat my edges rigid Ya nigga b building bridges vivid imagination Cleanin garbage niggas up call me da head of sanitation Dey try to rush me but im waitin Yung an restless but armed wit patience you know i got the dough so the cake I am a-bakin Niggas hope to reach my level get parallel dey just adjacent Which means dey next 2 me so gon head an pluck ya ACES Ima KING wit many QUEENS my queens got many faces So JACK b prepared armed wit 10’s got clips an cases Use da CARDS u were dealt stay true an don’t forsake it U could have a ROYAL FLUSH lifes a game watch how ya play it
Also what line stood out most to you? | |
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lilmike_35215 Superstar Spinna
Number of posts : 238 Age : 31 Location : Birmingham,Alabama Originated Wave Site : wavebuilder.com (it died) Reputation : Registration date : 2009-02-01
| Subject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS Mon Jun 01, 2009 2:33 am | |
| that shit sound on point 2 me but the shit i like tha most was Niggas hope to reach my level get parallel dey just adjacent Which means dey next 2 me so gon head an pluck ya ACES Ima KING wit many QUEENS my queens got many faces So JACK b prepared armed wit 10’s got clips an cases Use da CARDS u were dealt stay true an don’t forsake it U could have a ROYAL FLUSH lifes a game watch how ya play it u make yo own beats, got sum2 doin it 4 u or use beats by otha rappers? | |
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Suprah Wave-Sensei
Number of posts : 446 Age : 32 Location : Bronx Originated Wave Site : Slavebuilder Reputation : Registration date : 2007-08-23
| Subject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS Mon Jun 01, 2009 5:08 pm | |
| abc flow sound like dr. suess wrote it
get back and work on your craft
variate your rhyming paterrn | |
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Imfamus Wave-Sensei
Number of posts : 543 Age : 31 Location : The Chi Originated Wave Site : Wavebuilder.... R.I.P. Reputation : Registration date : 2009-01-31
| Subject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS Mon Jun 01, 2009 7:40 pm | |
| It sounds decent...post it in the Cypher Thread if you want to see what others think about it.... http://www.sbwaves.com/off-topic-f3/cypher-thread-t2101-76.htm#28512 | |
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Death(Troy504) Gallery Moderator
Number of posts : 1260 Age : 33 Location : New Orleans, Louisiana Originated Wave Site : Wavebuilder Reputation : Registration date : 2009-03-07
| Subject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS Mon Jun 01, 2009 7:44 pm | |
| I liked it, well u started off kinda shaky but everything after the 1st verse i liked. | |
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gataboyslim Ripplemania
Number of posts : 93 Age : 41 Location : from nj 2 va Originated Wave Site : Wave builder Reputation : Registration date : 2009-01-30
| Subject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS Tue Jun 02, 2009 1:51 am | |
| Not bad man. Da first verse was a lil' weak. I liked the second verse the best. I can tell u got some skills, u gave some conscious hip hop and some word play. Stay at it and always come from the heart. | |
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KoolAidNoSugar Show Stopper
Number of posts : 228 Age : 31 Location : Where Its ALL SMILES AND NO SUGAR Reputation : Registration date : 2009-05-18
| Subject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS Fri Jun 05, 2009 6:35 pm | |
| Well man you can seperate a lyricist/ emceee from a rapper by their rhyme structure. That first verse started almost every line with I or I'll. Simple as Hell. You picked it up a lil after there but keep working like how we keep brushing. | |
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**WAVENIGGA 3.5** 360 VETERAN
Number of posts : 769 Age : 33 Location : charleston, sc (chucktown) Originated Wave Site : WAVEBUILDER.COM Reputation : Registration date : 2009-01-31
| Subject: Re: RATE MY LYRICS Sat Jun 06, 2009 7:55 am | |
| u did better as u went along in ya rap.. keep it up.. | |
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